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Would you be so kind
As to shovel back in
The dirt from the hole
That I've dug myself in?

I wish for the earth
To swallow me now
As thoroughly as the foot
Now lodged in my mouth.

Let me fade into shadows
Forget we ever met,
This moment never happened,
Those words were never said.
Have any of you ever said something so incredibly stupid that you just want to curl up in a corner and fade from existence? That's happened to me more times than I can remember. So I wrote this short thing about it. It sucks, but whatever. I'll rewrite it if it's absolutely unbearable.
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Altosaviorite Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
It's as funny as it is painfully honest. Whatever you think of how well it was written, I think it has a simple tone that is almost impossible to capture normally. Well done!
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DarkZero2109 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :aww: It's always nice to hear people's opinions on my work. I'm glad you thought it was funny; that's what I had in mind when I wrote it, but I didn't feel I did it well enough. People keep telling me otherwise, though.
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DaimaRachel Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014
It does NOT suck! I really think it's wonderful. By the way, I believe short poems are the best because you can say a lot with a single verse. :)
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DarkZero2109 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I felt it was really weak when I first wrote it, but everyone keeps saying otherwise, so maybe it's just my self-deprecation acting up again.
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DaimaRachel Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014
I get you. It happens to me as well. I've written stuff that I consider poor but others don't.
Perhaps sometimes we can't see our own greatness.
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DarkZero2109 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
The artist's curse...nothing is ever good enough for its creator.
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DaimaRachel Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014
I agree. It's kind of annoying. Maybe it's just because I'm a pessimist. :/
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DarkZero2109 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Actually, based on what I hear from others here, a lot of artists suffer the same thing. I guess it's an art thing.
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DaimaRachel Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014
Yeah, I guess.
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anila73 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Heck, every moment of my life I want to peel the tiles off the floor like they're a carpet and live under them. Or open the ceiling and hide there. You know, somewhere I can still hear people without sight.
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